In many countries’ schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

It is widely observed that the behaviour of young
students
across many countries has radically changed in recent times.
This
essay will discuss the main reasons behind
this
development in detail and
also
suggest some measures through which
this
issue can be resolved.
Due to
the technological advancements in recent times,
students
are often seen using
internet
platforms like social media through mobile phones and computers. The
content
which is available on
such
platforms is entirely unfiltered and
contain
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explicit material like dark humour and racist
slurrs
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slurs
. Exposure to
such
content
cause direct implications on the cognitive development of
youth
who end up developing negative traits like lack of discipline. Take meme culture as an instance, it has
cultivate
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toxic radicalism in
youth
.
Furthermore
, lifestyle plays a major role in shaping the minds of individuals. Most
students
have
unhealthy
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way
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ways
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of living like
lack
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a lack
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of physical activities and excessive consumption of junk food which directly contributes to
adverse
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psychological
impact
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. A good illustration of
this
is the fact that food items like burger
contains
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toxins which trigger aggression in
human
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brain.
As a result
,
students
who consume fast food develop
short tempered
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nature in their being.
However
, these concerns can be remediated through several measures. Most importantly, the parents
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, as well as school staff,
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as well as
school staff should inculcate a habit of being diet conscious
to
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the
students
.
This
will help them in becoming more responsible
as well as
ensure that their mental health is not at stake.
On the other hand
,
youth
should not be allowed by their guardians to access
internet
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the internet
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apart from their academics.
As a result
,
students
will end up spending less time surfing
internet
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eventually avoiding toxic
content
on it.
Although
it may seem imperious to the
youth
, it will definitely bring a collective good for them. To sum it up,
this
essay discussed the reasons behind concerning code of conduct found in
students
across the globe. Exposure to explicit
content
on the
internet
combined with
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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lifestyle play
major
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a major
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role in
students
developing negative traits like excessive aggression and lack of discipline.
However
,
this
essay
also
illustrated that
this
concerning trend can be fixed if
youth
are made health conscious and not allowed to use
internet
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the internet
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.
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