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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year
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The table below illustrates data about differences in
type
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the type
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 of journey vehicles in
in
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England from 1985 to 2000
Overall
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,the table gives information about
type
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the type
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 of tool in a transport system ,
the
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apply
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transportation
have
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has
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an
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a
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 big
impacting
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impact
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to
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on
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 human
lifes
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lives
life
 but
also
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have
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has
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 disadvantages.
The travel
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Travel
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more
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is more
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 popular in that area and
moreover
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,
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car
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the car
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 uses more and taxi is high level. That situation shows
car
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 price is
unexpensive
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inexpensive
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 so that cause to
been
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be
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 a lot of utilises.
Firstly
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, in 1985 a walking , a
car
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, a local bus, a train and other hade been high level in the list
furthermore
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 the numbers are 255, 3199 , 429, 289 and 450 respectively. At the same time, during 15 years the walking, and a local bus would
be
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gradually decrease so been 237, and 274. Particularly, the
car
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 and other
number
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numbers
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 was a surge increase so become 4806 and 585
accordingly
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.
Secondly
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, the bicycle, a
long distance
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long-distance
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 bus and
a taxi numbers
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a taxi number
taxi numbers
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 hade been 51 ,54 and 13 in 1985.
Apparently
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,Apparently
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 in
2000
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,2000
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 there were no differences
each
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between each
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vehicles
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vehicle
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 but
also
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 taxi would
be increase
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be increased
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 greatly and
been
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be
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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