The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given diagram depicts how West Park Secondary
School
Use synonyms
transformed over 60 years from 1950 to 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
, it can be seen that the place underwent some significant changes throughout the period with the expansion of the
school
Use synonyms
building
as well as
Linking Words
the addition of a
car
Use synonyms
parking and sports field. In 1950, the
school
Use synonyms
had only one building located right next to a residential area. There was
also
Linking Words
a playground for students behind the
school
Use synonyms
, and farmland to the southwest of it. 30 years later after the first alteration, all houses were demolished to make room for a new science block and a
car
Use synonyms
parking lot. The farmland was removed to build a new sports field, which made the
school
Use synonyms
area much larger than its first construction. In 2010, there were some other marked changes made.
Whereas
Linking Words
the science block and main building of the
school
Use synonyms
remained the same, the
car
Use synonyms
park was broadened to the south, which increased its area by threefold.
As a result
Linking Words
, the sports field and playground were shrunken for the enlargement of the
car
Use synonyms
park.
Submitted by bta.abbey on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: