The graph illustrates the number of birth which happens from 1920 till 2020 in China and in the USA

The graph illustrates the number of birth which happens from 1920 till 2020 in China and in the USA
The line graph provides the proportions of births taking place in
China
and in the USA during an eight decades time frame going from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that
although
, in 1920, both countries started with a similar number and both their rates decreased, the USA ended with greater rates. About
China
, after the initial scale of 10% in 1920, it fluctuated during the next 20 years until it levelled off at 5% in 1940.
Next,
the figure rose to its peak of 20% in 1950, and
then
, after a dramatic drop in the following 5 years, it declined gradually throughout the next 45 years.
Similarly
, in the USA, the first analyzed data was just above
China
, followed by a constant fluctuating trend interrupted
at the end
of 1940 by a five-year sharp decline. Just after that, the percentage recovered reaching its peak at 15% in the same year in which
China
did it. At that point, it
finally
witnessed a steady fall.
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