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Nowadays internet addiction become trend discuss about causes and effects for this problem

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The
internet
 has changed our modern lives and has made them more convenient if we compare them with old times.
However
,
Internet
 addiction is growing among all ages and brings destructive consequences
such
 as an increase in anxiety, and many health issues.
To begin
 with, the main reason for addiction to modern technology might be a lack of parental monitoring.
In other words
, it is implausible for parents to devote enough time to their children
due to
 the stressful lifestyles they have.
Therefore
, teenagers become overdependence on social platforms
such
 as Instagram, and Facebook and spend most of their time there.
For instance
,
according to
 a survey which was released by Cambridge University a lack of parental guidance was the main reason for joining children in the virtual
world
 rather than caring about their lives and living in the moment On the other side, health issues, and depression are considered huge problems for
internet
 addiction. Spending too much time online could harm their bodies and will lead to a lonely lifestyle. Because
,
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 they might become obese or the light of the device's screen can harm their eyes. Obviously, in the modern
world
 people have expanded their personal relationships to the virtual
world
 rather than the real
world
, and
this
 situation has decreased face-to-face communication.
As a result
, these groups of people become more and more apart from the community. In conclusion, despite the fact that the
internet
 has enhanced our lives in the modern
world
 if youth are addicted to it, will develop a variety of problems. There are several things that should be considered for it, including health issues and anxiety
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