The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The given pie charts represent information about different age groups
such
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as 0-14
years
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, 15-59
years
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, and above 60
years
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of 2
country
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countries
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,
Yemen
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and Italy, in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Overall
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, the elderly
population
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would be increased in 2050 in both countries,
however
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,
0
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the 0
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-14
years
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group would be decreased in 2050, especially
the
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since the
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population
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drop in
Yemen
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is remarkable. First and foremost,
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in Yemen's
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Yemen's
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Yemen
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almost half of
citizens
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the citizens
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were 0-14
years
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old
compare
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compared
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to Italy's 14.3% of
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population
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the population
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. Nearly
quarter
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a quarter
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of people was above 60
years
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old in Italy, in 2000.
This
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ratio
significantly
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is significantly
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higher than
Yemen
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's elder people
as
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at
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3.6%.
Moreover
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, both countries' middle age groups were above %45 and for Italy
this
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ratio even higher than %60.
In contrast
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, in 2050 Italy's middle age group
percentages
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percentage
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among
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population
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the population
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would be estimated %
46.2
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at 46.2
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.
However
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, 50
years
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later
Yemen
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's 15-59
years
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old
population
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ratio would be increased
approximately
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by approximately
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11%. For
younger
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the younger
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generation
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,generation
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population
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ratios would be estimated %
37
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at 37
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and %11.5 for
Yemen
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and Italy respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, yemen, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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