The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The given pie charts represent information about different age groups

such

as 0-14

years

, 15-59

years

, and above 60

years

of 2

country

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countries

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Yemen

and Italy, in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Overall

, the elderly

population

would be increased in 2050 in both countries,

however

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the 0

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-14

years

group would be decreased in 2050, especially

the

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since the

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population

drop in

Yemen

is remarkable. First and foremost,

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in Yemen's

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Yemen's

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Yemen

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almost half of

citizens

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the citizens

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were 0-14

years

old

compare

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compared

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to Italy's 14.3% of

population

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the population

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. Nearly

quarter

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a quarter

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of people was above 60

years

old in Italy, in 2000.

This

ratio

significantly

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is significantly

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higher than

Yemen

's elder people

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3.6%.

Moreover

, both countries' middle age groups were above %45 and for Italy

this

ratio even higher than %60.

In contrast

, in 2050 Italy's middle age group

percentages

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percentage

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among

population

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the population

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would be estimated %

46.2

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at 46.2

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However

, 50

years

later

Yemen

's 15-59

years

old

population

ratio would be increased

approximately

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by approximately

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11%. For

younger

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the younger

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generation

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,generation

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population

ratios would be estimated %

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at 37

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and %11.5 for

Yemen

and Italy respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, yemen, population with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

166 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

population distribution
age group
population pyramid
projections
young population
aging population
demographic shift
increase in elderly population
proportion
percentage
population dynamics
top-heavy
balanced age distribution
healthcare needs
pension provision

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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Should we create more socially mixed residential areas where rich people live next to poor people, instead of in separate communities?

Some people say that the music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, most countries can improve the standard of living through economic development, but some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of this phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?