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QUESTIONS: WITH A FAST PACE OF MODERN LIFE MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE TURNING TOWARDS FASTFOOD FOR THEIR MAIN MEALS. DO YOU THINK ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE ADVANTAGES?

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In modern life, almost everyone
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lives
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live
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in
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at
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 a fast pace and there are
increasing
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an increasing
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 number of individuals
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who trend
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trend
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tend
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 to rely on the
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
 for their main
meals
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. There are some benefits
of
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this
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 approach,
however
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, I believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. On the one hand, no
on
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 could deny that
the
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
 changes
people
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 life in a positive way to some
extents
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extent
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.
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, people in modern life always have a tight schedule which doesn't allow them to cook for themselves or spend
to
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 much time in the
resturant
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restaurant
in
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 weekdays.
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 is absolutely
convienent
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convenient
 for them to have a meal quickly. In
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 way, they could keep on focusing
their
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 work
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 of distracting by wondering how to eat.
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, thanks to the
well developed
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fast food
fast-food
 industry, there
are
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 a variety of
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fast foods
 for
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the customer
a customer
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customer
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customers
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 to select
.
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from.
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, Chinese food, Japanese cuisine, western hamburger etc. It is easy for individuals to try
somethings
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something
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 new and explore different
cultrues
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cultures
.
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, though
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fast food
fast-food
 has some benefits, it is evident that the disadvantages overweigh the advantages. First of all, countless
researches
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 have been conducted
through
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 the world that reveal
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fastfood
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fast food
 is unhealthy.
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 you could save some time, it is not
a
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 approachable way to treat yourself better.
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, by having
fastfoof
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fast food
 in main
meals
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, individuals are
inevitable
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 to lost chance to spend time with their family.
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, when cooking
meals
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 at home, you could
naturaly
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naturally
 communicate and accompany
with
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apply
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your family.
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 deprives
this
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 opportunity
from
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 you.
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, once someone
render
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fast food
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 as their formal
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meals
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meal
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, they will become independent in the end
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lack
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 of ability in cooking for themselves. In conclusion, the disadvantages of
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fastfood
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fast food
 outweigh
thr
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the
 advantages. It is feasible for people to have
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
 sometimes, but they are not supposed to
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dependent
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 on it because of the
convience
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convenience
.
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