Many old cities around the world are going through a major process of modernisation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of modernisation?

There is no denying fact that the phenomena of modernisation
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ubiquitous across the globe
for instance
of transformation of old cities.
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of the folks are in the favour of
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and cons of the same will be discussed. Initiating
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the benefits of the same, the first key point is that old living areas will be converted into
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newly developed sites.
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survey shows that China is the most
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country specifically, for
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advanced infrastructure.
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to
this
technology has played
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role because of which, 70% of the advanced automation is being copied in
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places.
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another example
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can be that
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country like India has one of the
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most famous holy
city
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cities
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Amritsar. Which attract thousands of people due, to which the base of the city had to change into
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place.
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this
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into
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more job
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for the nation and
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in the GDP of the government.
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, some
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of modern cities
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that most of the population is going to be from
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class, which means they can’t afford the higher prices of the downtowns.
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population
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to cope
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with the living standard.
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it’s going to affect the economy.
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, the charm of the historical places will be diminished and less wildlife will be found.
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, no greenery will be found and it’s all going to
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transferred
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to artificial vegetation. In conclusion,
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is beneficial for
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the nation
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game of
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tech for the
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well-being
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of
population
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.
Thus
to reach their aims it does affect livelihood and habitat.
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