The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons
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This
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tab demonstrates the mechanisms and the method that leads to the fabrication matches. We are now going to analyse every tool and chemical substance through all the passages.
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process starts with a log peeled in veneers by a blade.
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every
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are gathered together in a file and chopped by a chopper into little pieces that are poured into an ammonium phosphate tank and
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dried in a round dryer. These fragments are now in a hopper that leads them to a storage area thanks to a blower.  Once in the storage area the matches fall onto a roller and
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in a tube, which ends as an inserter that can do the insertion of the pieces in a mechanism that leads to a space characterised by tree tanks containing respectively : paraffin wax; based chemicals and tip chemicals. Afterwards, all these fragments pass through a linked drying space and
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fall into the packaging area.
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