the piw charts below show the comparion of different kinds of energy production of France in two years

the piw charts below show the comparion of different kinds of energy production   of France  in two years
the pie charts demonstrate five different kinds of fossil fuel in France in the
years
1995 and 2005.
overall
, Gas, Coal and petrol were the biggest market share in both
years
which count over half of the
production
of energy, at the same time nuclear and other kinds of
production
were followed by a small percentage over the
last
10
years
period. In all types of
production
, there was a small minimal change in 10
years
. The highest consumer by energy
production
in the year 1995 was Coal with nearly 29.80 per cent and it showed in 2005 a very steadily increased 1% a mere 30.93.
although
Gas was found at 29.63 in 1995 and It
also
showed the same growth up to 30.31 % in the next 10
years
. Regards the other energy
production
showed a growth of
production
of approximately 5 % in both nuclear power and other sources to 10.10 and 9.10 respectively.
On the other hand
, petrol was the only source which decreased Dramatically from 29.27 in 1995 to around fifty (19.55) in 2005.
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