the piw charts below show the comparion of different kinds of energy production of France in two years

the piw charts below show the comparion of different kinds of energy production   of France  in two years
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the pie charts demonstrate five different kinds of fossil fuel in France in the
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1995 and 2005.
overall
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, Gas, Coal and petrol were the biggest market share in both
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which count over half of the
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of energy, at the same time nuclear and other kinds of
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were followed by a small percentage over the
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10
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period. In all types of
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, there was a small minimal change in 10
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. The highest consumer by energy
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in the year 1995 was Coal with nearly 29.80 per cent and it showed in 2005 a very steadily increased 1% a mere 30.93.
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Gas was found at 29.63 in 1995 and It
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showed the same growth up to 30.31 % in the next 10
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. Regards the other energy
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showed a growth of
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of approximately 5 % in both nuclear power and other sources to 10.10 and 9.10 respectively.
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, petrol was the only source which decreased Dramatically from 29.27 in 1995 to around fifty (19.55) in 2005.
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