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Money should be spent on creating new buildings rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Allocating monetary budgets to building new blocks or renewing the old ones has been a controversial issue in our society.
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 myriad people may worry about financial and time obstacles, I advocate using money
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 new structures and will address some of my supporting points in
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 essay. On the one hand, new construction sites are more costly and time-consuming.
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, starting a totally new development definitely requires more budget than merely conducting a few fixations. If the Government invests too much in new exorbitant projects, there will be more tax burden on every citizen.
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, time is another factor that should be taken into consideration.
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, making a new house from the ground to the top takes months or even years to complete
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 a renewal process saves quite a lot of time.
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, many dwellers oppose the idea of creating new structures.
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, other folks support new building projects as they believe making use of the old ones is neither safe nor convenient.
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 many buildings have been occupied for many decades or centuries;
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, their quality no longer meets standard requirements albeit being frequently renovated.
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, the layout of vintage buildings is out-of-date, which is not suitable for modern use.
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, previous apartments often have separated toilets and bedrooms
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 ,in
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 contemporary society, most inhabitants prefer en-suite rooms because
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 design style is more beneficial to them.
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, new construction should be carried out for safety and convenience purposes.
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, despite a few problems which are liable to occur during the construction of new sites, I concede that the sense of safety and comfy are
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 crucial to elevate people's living standards. As long as the Government can balance the financial ability and the people's needs, our society will become a better place to live in.
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