It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

It is often said that
people
benefit from taking
risks
in their personal
as well as
their professional lives.
However
, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and
argument
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also
can be made against the idea. We will discuss both sides of the argument and give a concluding view on why taking
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could be good for most
people
. On the one hand, those who support the idea of being open to
risks
, cite the various benefits
risks
can be accompanied with.
Firstly
, it could push
people
to improve themselves by learning new skills.
For example
, taking
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new responsibility in your job or moving to another country will require learning new techniques to be learned. Another advantage is the new opportunities that could come
along with
taking
risks
. Imagine all the new
people
a person might meet because of the new job they have accepted,
this
could potentially lead to making new friends and connections which could result in promotions.
By contrast
,
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out that not all
people
are living in a situation where taking
risks
is advisable or even possible. Examples could be seen in families which are expecting a baby. For these families, accepting a
risk
could lead to an unstable environment for all members
thus
would be better to be
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.
In addition
,
risks
could
also
lead to failure. Meaning that
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not all
risks
are beneficial
therefore
could worsen a person’s financial situation or
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even result in mental issues
such
as anxiety and depression.
Overall
, it seems advisable the decision
to
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take a
risk
should be based on a person’s family circumstances and throughout evaluation of the
risk
itself, rather than on a general view that all
people
should take
risks
.
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environment and the individuals themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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