The diagram shows the process of water treatment.

The diagram shows the process of water treatment.
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The given diagram illustrates the stages involved in
water
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purification.
Overall
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, there are ten main steps in the treatment of
water
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, which begins with
water
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being collected by an ake screen and ends with the faucet.
To begin
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, unclean
water
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is collected from the ocean with an intake screen.
Then
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ocean
water
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is been carried by the pump to a flash mix. In the mix,
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chloride and oxidants are mixed with
water
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.
In the
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next process involves the
water
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being carried by the pump to the flocculation chamber where particles are removed from the
water
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.
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Subsequently
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water
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is pumped to the settling basin
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water
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is allowed to settle down for a
while
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leaving tiny particles in the base of the basin. In the next stage
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water
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is pumped
to
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into
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the chlorine chamber and chlorine
are
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added to the clean
water
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. ,
Afterwards
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water
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is pumped to the filter membrane which contains smaller stones to help remove any remaining tiny particles from the
water
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.
Then
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pumped
water
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gets to the disinfection chamber and chlorine, lime( sodium hydroxide) and fluoride are mixed with filtered
water
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to kill any microorganisms. ,
Finally
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clean and safe
water
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is pumped to the faucet to deliver
water
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to various places.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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