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Governments should make people responsible for looking after their own local environment. Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #people #environment
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Mainly over the
last
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 ten years, taking care of the environment got on the most discussed matter among
people
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.
This
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 essay will point out why I fully believe Governments play a crucial role in making
citizens
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 responsible for a proper attitude and respect for local nature.
Firstly
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, I think everyone has a personal view of looking after
its
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 local environment, a certain and incontrovertible way to deal with it. That said, it is needed an “
above all
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” entity, a Government in
this
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 case, able to address
people
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 and raise a principle of own responsibility in them.
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,
the
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Ravenna’s Mayor, the
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Government
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 representative in my town, has pushed
citizens
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 several times to spend a portion of their spare time
in
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doing something good for the local forests or gardens.
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, I strongly believe that Federals play an important role in drawing up rules and regulations to make the entrepreneur easier acting to preserve nature and nearby surroundings.
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, Governments can push companies to face some expenses making them tax facilitated.
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 approach
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 both
citizens
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 and organizations
joined
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 and focus on a specific responsibility.
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, over the
last
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years
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 it has been argued whether Governments should directly involve
people
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 in looking after nature or not. In my opinion, Government should address
people
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 in taking care of their local environment since everyone has
its
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their
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 own way to handle
this
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 matter and it should draw up the framework of rules and regulations to make
citizens
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 responsible and facilitated at doing something for the local surroundings.
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