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some people feel that entertainers are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? which other types of job should be highly paid?

#people #entertainers #money #job
Social
networks
 are an important part of our life, because we get most of the news from social
networks
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 I have found in the table. I can identify the important indicators in
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 table. The first
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majority is
the
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“Instagram”
and
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amount
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33
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, I believe that
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 indicator so big because of interest and variety. In my opinion “Instagram” has information and content for every taste
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 example: some stories for teena
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 and different things, some news for adults, some things. So
this
 a social network popular among the
people
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networks
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a
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“Twitter” Only 3% use
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, “Twitter”putting
this
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also
people
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32
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%, which is not much less than " Instagram”. In my opinion,
people
 aren't interested “
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”, because there
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 little interesting content,
while
 „Instagram” and “Snapchat” have all categories for interest for
people
. I think that in order to solve
this
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problem
, creators should make more sections for photos and videos
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 whit-out comments. In conclusion, I believe that social
networks
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 only for fun and
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 but
it
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also
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world
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the world
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.
People
 use
this
 for their knowledge.
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