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Too much emphasis is placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examinations is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the educational
system
 dominates the test examination.
This
 trend affects both
students
 and
educators
 by creating a strict disciplined and controlled
education
 which pressures both sides respectively. In
this
 essay, I advocate my agreement with the statement. Pupils accept a big number of
tests
 and exams from
educators
 and in many cases, they cannot put them through. The stress and anxiety at these ages are provoked mainly by school demands.
For instance
, when I was a teenager, my major goal was to have a remarkable score big enough that it would lead me to university.
Moreover
, I studied a lot, and the un-warning
tests
 and the burden of exams affected me in the worst way, I started having panic attacks.
Hence
, I believe that
education
 has some points that if they changed the
students
 could be more productive without negative stressors.
However
, I do not blame the
educators
 for these negative stressors but in general the function of the educational
system
.
Educators
 have been dealing,
also
, with
this
 non-functional
system
. The meaning of their work is important, and they are trying to find a way to manage the stressful situation that the
students
 going through.
Therefore
, the modern
system
 demands daily
tests
 and often exams. To
further
 illustrate
this
 point,
educators
 cannot deal with the pressing time that the educational
system
 requires. In
this
 vein, anxiety disorders might be triggered by
educators
 and academics
also
. They feel that they cannot fulfil the requirements of their profession, and
this
 has a negative impact on their personal and professional life.
Additionally
, that negative behaviour could be another stressful factor for young
students
 and could affect the equally. In conclusion,
tests
 are a vital part of
education
 when
students
 do them occasionally without stress and strict deadlines. The educational
system
 should change for the best future of the
students
 and their
educators
. The goal should be the optimisation of
education
 and
furthermore
 of young people's lives.
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