The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
introduction: We are now explaining the method that leads to the fabrication matches, analysing every tool and chemical substance through all the passages.
This
process starts with a log peeled in veneers by a blade.
Then
every stripes are gather together in file and chopped by a chopper in little pieces that are poured in an ammonium phosphate tank and
then
dryed in a round dryer. These fragments are now in an hopper that leads them to a storage
area
thanks to a blower. Ones in the storage
area
the matches fall on to a roal and
consequently
in a tube, which ends as an inserter that can do the insertion of the pieces in a mechanism that leads to an
area
characterised by tree tanks containing respectively : paraffin wax; based chemicals and tip chemicals.
Finally
all these fragments pass through a linked drying
area
and afterward fall into the packaging
area
.
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