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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people say that manufacturers and supermarkets have the accountability to decrease the amount of packaging of goods.
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 there are those who put forward the idea that consumers should avert themselves from purchasing
such
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products
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To begin
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 with, it is up to the big companies and retailers should be held liable for how much packing they will use in their produced
items
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. The reason is they know the quality of the
items
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 that will be sold in the market and have the proper knowledge if the
products
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 will remain their quality by the time of
delivery
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 to the consumers.
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, a food corporation created a pre-cooked meal and is subjected to
delivery
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 to different countries worldwide. From the preparation process, packaging and
delivery
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, the company already knows if the sterility and freshness of their product can be sealed securely and stay edible by the time of
delivery
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.
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, maybe a single tight-sealed plastic covering is enough to ensure the quality of the item
that is
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 for
delivery
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.
On the other hand
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, customers should avoid purchasing
items
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 with a lot of packaging. As it can be a warning signal for those manufacturers and supermarkets that their
items
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 are not in demand anymore
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their consumers. It can be seen through surveys
as well as
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 during the company and retailer's monthly evaluation of profit and revenue.
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, producers of a certain product will try to lessen the amount of packing they will use in their produced
items
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 to attract again more customers and make up for the losses in their total sales. In my opinion, big change can start from small actions. If individuals and people in a community will stop being
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 to buy
products
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 that come with thick packaging, it can actually dissuade those companies and supermarkets to produce more
products
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 with large amounts of coverage and wrappings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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