Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Is this a positive or negative development ?

Certain intellectuals think that it is good for
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because young ones are able to capture things very fast when they are young .
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since they have less stuff to store in their conscious memory.
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and competency in studying a foreign
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with studies when they
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to a new
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of languages in Ghana stays that about 67% of
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cannot speak their own local
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a foreign
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make it easier and faster for them to accommodate the
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learning a foreign
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can
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the benefits of learning a foreign
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outweigh the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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