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Due to poorer countries experiencing a brain drain they are seeing many professionals, such as doctors and teachers leaving to work in more developing countries. What problem does this cause? What solutions can be suggested to deal with this solution?

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It is undisputable fact that a number of
profissionals
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professionals
such
 as
doctors
 and teachers tend to go
another
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country
 in order to get opportunities and earn more money that they could not make money in their own
country
 because of poor operations of the
government
. It can be
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the cause
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cause
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 of being brain drain. It means the community might be faced with
multitude
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a multitude
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 of issues in
their
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 future.
Firstly
, we are growing up, most of us dream of having a family and
new
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a new
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 comfortable residence,
that is
 why a lot of individuals have been going
to
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apply
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overseas in order to work because they are not satisfied with these opportunities in their own
country
.
For example
,
doctors
 should be taught about 7 years.
For
this
 reason, they
maight
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might
 desire to work with enough convenience
such
 as their own room, own business.
However
, the
government
 could not support them with
this
 kind of
facilities
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facility
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.
Furthermore
, there are certain solutions for
this
 issue to
inhance
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enhance
 the
government
 of the
country
as well as
 to save
profissionals
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professionals
 of the population.
Following
this
, the
government
 had better
to
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apply
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pay attention to
develop
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developing
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 their culture by
envesting
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investing
 money
for
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in
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 their employers. Not only they should care for education but
also
 they
shoud
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should
 be
sereous
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serious
for
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about
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th
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the
teacher's
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teachers'
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 salary
as well as
 the treatment
alsa
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also
 require care for the best
medicine
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medical
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 service.
For example
, when someone needs
an
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emergency help
then
 they are not able to be gone to
hospital
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the hospital
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 because of
long
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the long
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 distance.
Hence
, there should be
multitude
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a multitude
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 of educated people
such
 as
doctors
.
To conclude
, the number of professionalized people in
third world
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third-world
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 countries is decreasing, resulting in
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an issue
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issue
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issues
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 like the unavailability of
doctors
 and skilled workers in some areas.
However
, the
government
 and organizations have a role to play by investing in education and salaries
to
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for
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 their citizens
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