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Currently, there is a trend toward alternative forms of medicine. However, at bests these methods are ineffective, and at worst, they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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, there is a trend toward
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forms
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,at best these methods are ineffective,and at worst,they may be dangerous.In
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forms
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merits
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 statement. On the one hand,there are several
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,it is dangerous because
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alternative forms
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 of medical not
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parsentage
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 patients feel uneasy because
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 do not
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procedure
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 so patients
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 about whether the disease will be cured.
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,there are
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 advantages of
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 patients.The
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forms
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 can be done
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without
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a hospital
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hospital
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hospitals
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 or medical machines,
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forms
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.What is more,it is often said that
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.Some
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streast
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stressed
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 to the hospital.So
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streats
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using alternative
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forms
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,
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 our body.So less burden on the body.
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,
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forms
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 do not have to go to
hospital
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 so good for
people
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 for work or other reasons. In conclusion,in my
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that
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sslightly
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slightly
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forms
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. Especially,undeveloped countries.I think that in the
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forms
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than
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