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Some people think that children should be taught to competitive in school. Others however, think cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both views/sides/points.

#people #children #school #cooperation #team #skills #points
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education
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 vital in the future so many parents want to their children learn knowledge at
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university. Many people often said that students ought to learn
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 in
school
. But the next groups of humans, illustrate
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opinion
 is co-operation and together working practices are significant. That tendency has a number of benefits and
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problems.
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 views in support of the latter. On the one hand, the
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also
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force curriculum programs.
Moreover
, Europe,
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Asia
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 and
America
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 countries have more practices in that field. Especially,
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Japan state set up
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 at schools so a lot of countries quote these situations
such
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last
 decade that tendency became useful things for
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population
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.
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, The reports of Azerbaijan statistics numbers
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last
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gradual increase and reached a peak
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 rate was 97%. That high rate of quantity because Azerbaijan habitants
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.
Nevertheless
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 there are some drawbacks
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 the reason many students
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other
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 fields.
On the other hand
, currently time the studying development is unsatisfying for some parents, for the reason the
school
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work
 life. Obviously, those humans
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cooperation
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for cooperation
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 and
team
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teamwork
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work
 because
team
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work
 and others provide some skills. Indeed, particularly
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some skill
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 more
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 that the
school
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employeers
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employers
employees
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article
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 ''Special Practise'.
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atmosphere
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 growth so
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 condition wants some special knowledge
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as team
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team
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teamwork
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work
 practise, agile management and social
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. In conclusion, there
are
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 some general
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 so each group has a few
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 and some
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disadvantages
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. The essay is discussed
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 view and
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aspects.
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a
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 next decade the government must
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diffusion
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a diffusion
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 educational system.
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