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The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organized. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Very organised % All students 21 Age up to 22 years 18 Age 23-25 years 26 Age over 26 years 35

The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organized. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Very organised % All students 21 Age up to 22 years 18 Age 23-25 years 26 Age over 26 years 35
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 level of financial management capacity.
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 the table below describes the
percentage
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students'
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student's
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response
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 on their finance management capability based on age.
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the
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graphic, 21% of
students
 are categorised as very organised. Based on the data of the table, amongst them,
students
 who
becomes
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 older, tend to have a higher probability to be very organized with the average number of
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 8 to 9 %.
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, the
percentage
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students
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moderate
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 (not as good or bad) ability to manage their money is slightly different
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 the best student, which is 1%
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different.
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, the least
students
, about 4% of
students
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lack
ability
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 in managing their money. All in all, it can be concluded from the graph that the majority of
students
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 ability to organise their money with
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percentage
 of 35%.
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