In the past many people had skills such as making their own clothes and doing repairs to things in the house. In many countries, nowadays, skills like these are disappearing. Why do you think this change is happening? How far is this situation true in your country?

The skills start to disappear since
people
do not have
time
and do not want to learn about them.
Time
is essential, and
people
prefer to spend their
time
with their jobs rather than make something that they can buy easily in offline or online
stores
. So many years ago, life is simple. Parents pass the skill to their children, but now the children choose not to be like their parents. They decide what they want and think that making something is not cool and wasting
time
. Nowadays, we can see many developments everywhere in any sector, including the retail and
furniture
industries. Everything we need is just at our fingertips. Many
stores
provide cute dresses, pants, skirts, and even socks that you can find everywhere and anytime. The
stores
have everything you need. You do not need to think get the materials and how long you need to make it.
In my
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grandparent's
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era, I still remember that they make everything by themselves. They use their basic knowledge to make everything they need,
such
as traditional
clothes
and
furniture
(desk, bench and cupboard) in their home with wood from the forest and they choose the best materials for it. The new generation needs everything in a simple way; rather than make their own
clothes
and
furniture
, they prefer to buy them in the offline or online store. It will take a moment
than
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you make it by yourself. Even young
people
do not know how to make a simple stitch. Buy
clothes
and
furniture
in the
stores
is cheaper than you make by yourself. The influencers and advertisements suggest you buy so many kinds of
clothes
or
furniture
they say about many advantages and how cool you are, we can say now as fast fashion and
people
tempted to buy any styles to fit with their occasions because it is simple and Cheaper.
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