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The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old.

The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old.
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The bar chart reveals the separate proportion of
three
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 types
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books
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 that people under 30 years old read. The table indicates the rate of reading a book and the number of average
books
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 among
three
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 different age groups.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the least percentage covered in the audiobook,
wheares
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whereas
wheres
, in print
books
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, the figures were at their peak with regards to
three
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 ages. It
also
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 can be seen that reading a book was the most favourable choice of
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the 16
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-17-year-old generation
in contrast
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 to the age from 18 to 24,
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which was
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 the minimum option. Looking at the first graph in more detail, the proportion of reading printed version
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 the highest among
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three
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the three
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 ages, at over 80%, approximately 72% and above 70% respectively, which were higher than
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the other
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 two types, approximately four times as high as the rate. Turning to the second graph, 90% of
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the 16
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-17-year-old bracket stood at the peak with
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an
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 average
12
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of 12
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books
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.
However
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, the group of 18-
24-year-old
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24-year-olds
 and 25-29-year-old shared a similar trend of reading, at 79% and 81%
saparately
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separately
, with 11
books
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on averagely
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averagely
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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