The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not

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in UK

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students who did not go to full-time jobs after university in 2008.

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, the most common destination for graduate

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, as well as postgraduate learners,

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as well as

postgraduate learners was

further

study.

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, the least popular in both cases was voluntary

work

. The majority of young adults after graduation chose

further

study and it reached just under thirty thousand registrants.

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the

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minority of pupils at the same time chose voluntary

work

with the level of 3,500 thousand scholars.

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, just above 15,000 thousand were unemployed and working part-time. When it comes to postgraduate enrollment in 2008 the most popular destination for masters was

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study with the approximate number of participants in the region of 2,725. In second place was part-time

work

with

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number just above 2,535.

Besides

that, the least crowded destination was voluntary

work

with a score of 345 students, which makes it the least popular among students.

Additionally

, quite a few people chose unemployment with an amount just above 1,500.

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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not

A lot of people believe that the amount of violence shown on TV and in the cinema affects the actions of our young people and therefore increases the amount of violence in our society today. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be done to reduce violence in our society today?

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