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The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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When the word
music
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 comes into our mind, it is first considered as a source of entertainment, but
music
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 actually has the quality to lower
one
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's stress. I agree with
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 notion to a certain extent. I'll try to shed light on my perspectives in the upcoming paragraphs.
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, I will try to discuss my opinion on the positive impact of
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 on the mind. In
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 competitive world, everyone has a hectic schedule, so everybody needs something to take off the anxieties, worries, and tensions facing their day-to-day lives. Melody has in-built quality the
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 when
one
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 listens to
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, a person is completely forgotten about the ups and down going into their life, and their minds completely get into the rhythm of the
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. Most significantly, it does not require any specific
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 to
listen
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 it
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 doing a number of daily activities, people can hear the
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, and get benefits from it.
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, on the other aspect, I believe that opera works as a stress reliever or not, it depends upon the type of
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one
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 is listening to.
Music
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 having a classic genre, and those are a bit of medium pitch will actually help to calm the brain for a long
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. Even, when an individual is not listening to it still it has an impact on them for a
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.
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, a few pieces of
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 like jazz, and rock style are not effective, their high volumes and pitches stressed out the minds.
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: If the person is experiencing depression for a long
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,
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such
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 a piece of
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 will not beneficial to them to calm their mind;
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 it, it will give more stress to them.
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, the former will put a positive influence on them, not a significant impact, but aids to provide relaxation for some
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. In the end, I will like
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 my topic by saying that
music
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 is considered
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 of the remedies which assist to get relax from the routine hustles, but it all depends upon the type of
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, If someone chooses the wrong
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 to make themselves stress-free, it will even make their mental scenario more worst in the future.
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