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In many countries students who leave high school have no understanding of how to manage their money What do you think are the reasons?What can be done to improve chis important skill?

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it is true that In many countries
students
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 who leave high school have no understanding of how to manage their
money
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.there are various reasons for
this
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 condition ,and measures need to be taken to track it . there are some reasons lead to
this
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 condition,and the main reason is that with the economic development ,most people are living happily,and they do not worry about they may have any
money
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 in the future,
for instance
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,because young teenagers lack self-control ,so
children
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 may run out
money
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 with no any plans, and
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 their
parents
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 gave their
children
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money
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 freely ,so that may give
children
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 a sense that whenever they do not have
money
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 ,and their
parents
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 will support them no restrictions.
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,the
students
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 did not accept the knowledge related
money
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,so that they have no ideas how to manage their
money
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 .
therefore
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, their
parents
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 have no conscious to teach their
children
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 how to save
money
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 and allocate
money
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 carefully in their daily life,
therefore
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 ,these
students
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 have no habit to save
money
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 or allocate
money
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 reasonably.
however
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 ,various measures can be taken to address
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 situation.
firstly
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 ,
parents
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 have the responsibility to set good role models for their
children
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 about managing
money
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 ,and give their
children
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 regular allowance every week ,and let their
children
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 allocate
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money
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 by themselves ,
therefore
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 to develop their
children
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 the independent skill to manage
money
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.
secondly
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, the school
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 have a responsibility to provide a broad curriculum ,and guide their
students
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 for the knowledge-based economy,
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students
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 can gain practical experience .and the government should raise public awareness of improve teenagers how to manage
money
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. in conclusion,there are several causes of
this
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 situation,various measures could be taken to improve it.
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