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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime , and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Many
people
 hold the view that
punishments
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 offenders need to be fixed,
while
 others think the judgement should take into account the complex backgrounds on which a criminal act happens. Personally, I believe that a reasonable punishment ought to consider the varied context and
individules'
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individuals'
motive
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motives
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. On the one hand, in some
people
's views, it is fixed
punishments
 that can present the fairness of laws. If judgements vary
according to
 different motivations, many
people
 probably have a large number of
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explanations
, which are favourable for themselves, about their law-breaking behaviours. Meanwhile, motivation
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happens
 in these offender's inner
world
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worlds
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 and is not visible, which may lead to problematic
punishments
 if the lawbreakers and their lawyers contend that they
are not intend
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are not intended
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 to commit
such
 crimes or
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 offenders do it for a
worth
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 understanding purpose.
On the other hand
, other
people
 may argue that fixed sentences ruin the lives of
people
 who
are not deliberately commit
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are not deliberately committing
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the
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mistakes. Undisputedly, many individuals kill or hurt other
people
 because they have no others ways but have
to
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self-defense
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self-defence
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. Domestic violence is a good example. Some husbands have a long history of
assualting
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assaulting
 their wives even in a cruel way, but their
neighbors
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 may not know when things
happens
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 and could not offer any help.
Under
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this
 situation, the wife may kill her husband for protecting herself from being seriously
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, which should be understood rather than
impose
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 a harsh punishment on her. In conclusion, a convincing judgement can fully consider the context in which
of
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a
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behaviour happens,
although
 fixed
punishments
 may reflect the fairness of the justice system.
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