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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

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Introduction
In some countries, ownership of
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house
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the house
a house
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 is
important
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an important
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 matter
..
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.
...
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These countries made houses
instead
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 of renting is
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a curucial
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curucial
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crucial
 decision.
Body paragraph 1
I accord to the notion,
house
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give
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gives
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 you feel of
attachement
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attachment
 with the items
as well as
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fell
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feel
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 comfortable.
Body paragraph 2
Why might
this
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 be the case? It is because you think exactly the same as you think about your home.
For instance
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, an
invidual
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individual
 can live freely there without the fear of
landlord
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a landlord
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 . And
fell
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feel
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 relaxed
whole
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my whole
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 life without the fear of renting.
Body paragraph 3
Secondly
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, he
decorate
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decorates
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 his
recident
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resident
 place
according to
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 his taste and changed
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the damage
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damage
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damaged
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part
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parts
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 of
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house
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the house
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 anytime
for
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to
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protect
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protecting
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others
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other
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family
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,family
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 members.
House
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also
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 helps us
in
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with
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 financial support. One room or one portion will be used for renting
purpose
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purposes
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.
Nevertheless
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, in
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house
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the house
a house
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 you can arrange parties
through out
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throughout
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 the night with full music
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apply
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whereas
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, no one
complain
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complains
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 to your landlord and
enjoy
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enjoys
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 parties at any time.
Conclusion
I'm conclusion, in
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the house
a house
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house
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,house
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 you
fell
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feel
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 reflexed and can have
alot
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a lot
 of members with you.

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