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Some people resist changes in their lives while others think that change is an integral part of life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Life
 is like a road full of plains and bumps. Some
people
 think that change is an inevitable part
while
 others don't like
changes
 in their lives. I personally think that living a
life
 with a balance of stables and
changes
 could lead
people
 to happiness.
People
's lives are full of
changes
 as time goes by.
Life
 starts from baby to teenager,
go
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goes
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 through adult to middle age, and
finally
 to old and die. Different stages of
life
 have different
variation
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variations
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. It's an integral part of
life
.
Besides
changes
of
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in
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life
 growth, we might
also
 face chance
changes
,
such
 as
switch
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Job
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Jobs
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, migrating to a new country, moving to a new house, etc.
Changes
 sometimes bring happiness and luck
while
 sometimes bring sadness and unluck. Especially for some aggressive
people
,
changes
 are the adventures they would like to take and make
life
 better. It makes
life
 colourful and meaningful.
However
, not all
people
 like changeable lives and they enjoy peaceful days more,especially young children and the old generation. A stable
life
 will leave them
a
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comfortable and familiar environment to live at a normal pace of their own, which is good for their physical and mental health.
For example
, a 90-year-old man would be better
living
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 in his own cosy home surrounded by all the familiar furniture and decorations. So in my conclusion, Enjoying
changes
 and resisting
changes
 depend on
people
 and
this
 is a 2-sides of the coin that we shall try to keep a balance of them.
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