Behaviour in school is getting worse .Explain the causes and the effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions

At
this
time, young
people
's behaviour is getting worse in school. Here it is my thought and perspectives on
this
issue and I will explain them.
Nonetheless
, we all know that our school is the source of the young
age
to know more about life and cannot get it their own house or parents
such
as how they can learn about the meaning of education to our life, proper interactions to other
people
and what to do in near future. Simple homework to do their house and will explain to the next class, is the task our young
age
need to do and to know their educators what they need to teach the listener.
In addition
, there are many causes and effects that need to elaborate on that the behavioural of young
age
is changing and worsening.
Firstly
, some of them are struggling with bullying by their seatmates inside the room and even outside the building, they can't cope up how to face
this
issue and suddenly makes feel them alone and don't want to go to an institution and part of some are became much worse than the bullier folks.
Secondly
, our generation
this
day is not like before old generation, they rapidly changing when it comes to social media and in the days of the pandemic all classes are using websites, and online classes when lecturing their children and some of their listeners are feeling bored and faking of their teacher that they are listening. As result
this
situation right now is getting worse in our community young
age
are not anymore interested in education, they are young to have their own family and
this
can lead to the adaptation of their future children and most serious effects too many
people
are bad in our society became murderer, robbery and taking advantages to other
people
. The solution to
this
problem, be aware what is the problem or struggle of our own children when going to the institute, talk to them nicely and be an active listener and if you know the problem talk to concerned
people
in the school so you'll together figure it out; how to solve
this
issue and most important thing to do conducting or giving free education to the public
are
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not capable to study
due to
financial constraint. In conclusion, we need to open our eyes and mind to do a better plan for our society so we can figure out what is the best way to solve and get a positive outcome for other
people
. Be fair enough to all
people
and give them a chance to become better
people
.
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