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The chart illustrates the difference consumption of pepsi and milk in Vietnam between 1970 and 2000.

The chart illustrates the difference consumption of pepsi and milk in Vietnam between 1970 and 2000.
The given graph describes the difference
consumption
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 between
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pepsi
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 and milk in Vietnam from 1970 to 2000.
Overal
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,the
ultilization
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utilisation
 of
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pepsi
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has
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fell
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 for about 30 years from 1970 to 2000.
On the contrary
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, milk has been
more
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 popular
consumer’s
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 choice around the same time. From 1970 to 1980, the consumption of
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pepsi
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 increased sharply
at
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to
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 80
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millions
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 litres/
week
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.
Milk’s
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 drinking experienced a slight
a
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jump from 20
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millions
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million
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/
week
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 to 50
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millions
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million
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/
week
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. In the next 20 years ,there was a
dramatical
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 decrease in
the
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pepsi
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 expenditure to reach
at
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50
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millions
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million
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/
week
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(
in1990
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in 1990
).
Then
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 it
not
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does not
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 change
beetween
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between
 1990-2000.After falling slightly between 50 to 30
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millions
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million
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 litres from 1980 to 1990 ,
the
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milk drinking went up to the 80
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millions
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million
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in
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ten years later.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pepsi, millions, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "difference" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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