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The bar chart below shows the production of the world’s oil in OPEC and non-OPEC countries. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart below shows the production of the world’s oil in OPEC and non-OPEC countries. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The chart provides data on
production
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 volumes of
oil
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 by
OPEC
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 collaboration and by the rest of the world during three time periods.
It is clear that
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OPEC
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 countries produced almost 10 barrels of the total from 1980 to 2000,
while
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 the percentage of
non-
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OPEC
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 accounted for about 3. The situation changed significantly in 2000
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 when
OPEC
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 Middle East penetrated the
oil
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 market and made up approximately one-third of the total. The proportion of
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, produced by other
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 halved, to only 5. The percentage of
non-
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OPEC
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production
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 increased approximately 2 times during the second period (2000-2010). Probing
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non-
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OPEC
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production
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 shew an upward trend and made up more than 15 from 2010 to 2020. Volumes of
oil
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, produced by
OPEC
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 associates reduced significantly during the third period.
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, the share of
non-
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OPEC
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 countries increased marginally from 1980 to 2020,
while
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 countries, related to the
OPEC
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 organization reduced their
production
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 capacities.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, oil, opec, non-opec with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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