The chart gives information about how commuters travelled to work in one city in New Zealand.

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The bar chart compares different ways of travelling to work among certain citizens in New Zealand in 1996 and 2006.

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, it can be observed that using private

car

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cars

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and

truck

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trucks

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by far were the most popular

ways

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way

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to reach

the

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apply

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work.

However

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, the least popular form of

transport

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in one city in New Zealand were

train

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trains

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motorcycle

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motorcycles

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and others. In 1996, the number of employed people using private car or truck was exactly 50%,

this

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figure fell dramatically and the second

popular

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most popular

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transport

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were

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was

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company vehicle and working at home, about 10% for each one.

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, at the same time the least often used

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transport

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transports

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were motorcycle and other forms, about 1% and 2% respectively. In 2006, the highest percentage of working people using private

transport

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was about 37%. The second most used

transport

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the same year was a company vehicle, about 15%.

However

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, the least popular among

employess

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employees

employers

were train, motorcycle and other

transport

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, about 3%, 1% and 2% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

163 words

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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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