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The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
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The given line graph gives data about the
crimes
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 that occurred in
newport
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Newport
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 city
center
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centre
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 from 2003 to 2012.There are three different
kind
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kinds
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 of
crimes
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.They are
the
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apply
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burglary
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,
the
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apply
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car
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theft
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 and
the
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robbery. Looking at the graph as a whole,
burglary
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 and
car
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theft
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was
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dicrease
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decrease
decreased
 between 2003 and 2012
while
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 robbery remained
all
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the
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 most constant. In detail,in 2003
higest
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highest
 rate of
crimes
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 was done is
burglary
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 which is 3500 and the lowest crime was done is
burglary
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.After that
buragrlary
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burglary
 keeps on decreasing and in 2008 it was move up and down slightly.Robbery remained
all
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the
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 most constant at about 600 incidents
this
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pirod
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period
.
Car
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theft
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 was
no
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not
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 change
frome
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from
 2003 and 2005 but in 2005 an decreased large.After that
car
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theft
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 moved up and down steadily.In 2010
car
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theft
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over
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of over
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the
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apply
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2500,
then
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 fell steadily.As you can see,the number of three
diiferent
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different
kind
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kinds
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 of
crimes
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 reached a peak of about 3600 in 2004.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, burglary, car, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recorded
  • trends
  • criminal activity
  • categories
  • theft
  • assault
  • vandalism
  • graph
  • x-axis
  • y-axis
  • number of crimes
  • visual representation
  • changes
  • crime rates
  • fluctuating pattern
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