Some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Nowadays there are enough numbers of people around the
worldwide
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who think that library books do not have any role and it is not any hobby for anyone.From my perspective, I disagree with
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proposal.
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On the other hand
,
book
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the book
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is
essential
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an essential
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thing in humanity.
For example
, any
people
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has
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ever
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read some stories, novels or sagas in their childhood or now,hereby they have been heard from someone alternatively they told to someone like the above.One of the best advantages is that reading is
pastime
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from my life experience.
On the other
hand
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textbooks have got illustrated pages,many interesting tasks
question
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- answers and so on .
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situation
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on any child .At the same time these
days
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majority
children
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are playing games on smartphones.
This
is one of the most painful points for us
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because playing games that are not suitable for
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of
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children will have a negative effect on their thinking skills and
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will not develop.It can remain or be connected to
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life in the game,but I think that
this
  will not happen in the books owing to the fact that the
book
is of great importance in our intellectual and spiritual maturity.
To conclude
considering the aforementioned points
book
have always played an important role in humanity and we should not forget that we should never replace
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book
which is our most needed material of
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knowledge
with smartphones or computers.
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