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Most of people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agree that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development ?

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Living in a globalised world become a part of human life. Many
people
belive
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 that living in
globalised
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a globalised
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 world brings negative effects on them,
whereas
 some of them argue that living in
this
 modern era will be helpful in many ways.
However
, in my view, I perceived
this
 trend as a positive development for two main reasons. The major reason is it will be easier to get
information
. By having high technology that serves by
globalised
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the globalised
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 world,
people
 can access
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information
 from anywhere and everywhere. For illustration, teachers that need to learn
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new material can easily access the internet to get
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information
 about the material.
However
, it will be very helpful in
education
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 field and help students
understanding
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 the material better. The next reason is getting more understanding of
human's
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principles
.
Globablisations
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Globalisation
serves
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serve
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 the technology that can help
people
 to move from one place to another place
such
 as
plan
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plane
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, train and bus.
This
 movement gives
people
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the oppurtunity
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oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to meet other
people
 especially
people
 from other countries.
For instance
, when we meet
western
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 we cannot judge the way they behave just because it is different
with
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 our
principles
.
People
 can not judge other
people
 only from one perspective.By
provided
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providing
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the
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globalisation,
people
 can learn to understand the
principles
 of human lives.
To sum up
,
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globalisation helps
people
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people's
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 lives in many ways
such
 as getting easier to get
the
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information
 and getting more understanding of
human's
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human
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principles
. I
firmly
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am firmly
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 convinced that
this
 trend has a positive development
in
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 human lives.
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