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Teachers used to convey information, but now students have access to a wide resources of information, there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#teachers #information #students #access #resources #role #education
In today's
era
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students
 have
acess
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access
 to various
resource
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 of
information
 and it is believed by some of them that
teachers
 have no part in today's modern education
whereas
, earlier
teachers
 would provide
information
. I disagree that
teachers
 are not required
infact
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in fact
, they play a significant role
inspite
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in spite
 of having
acess
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access
 to enhance your knowledge.
While
 some think that
teachers
 are not required for
students
, it is important that
students
 are taught subjects and are provided with
information
 though one can access books or
internet
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. One may have access to various resources of
information
such
 as
library
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a library
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, internet etc.. yet, when the subjects are taught to
students
 they would understand the concepts better.
For instance
, a subject like mathematics should be taught in order to understand how to solve
the
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problems,
likewise
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 physics is a subject with concepts and principles which would enable
students
 to understand them better.
Additionally
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 when subjects are taught in a classroom there is more scope for ideas and interactive sessions which will help the other
students
 who may not be good academically.
This
 would help the
students
 to think the right way and encourage them in clearing their doubts
while
 other
students
 may get more clarity with their thought process as to how to think. In general,
students
 should be taught by
teachers
 or professors which helps them discuss their views on various topics
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is
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 open for discussions in classrooms.
This
 will
also
 help the children build friendships, interact with one
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another be more open to critics.
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