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Agree or disagree with the following statement: Pets should be treated like family members.

#pets #members
Most people in the world agree that
,
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 there are some
animals
 like
pets
 should take a handsome treattreate from their owners in any place they are,
,
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personally
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 I believe that whole
pets
 should have good behaviour human, I feel
this
 way for two reasons which I will explore in the
Following
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 essay I firmly believe that
pets
 nowadays are taking a good treat from their owners in any country in the world
animals
 and
whole
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 dogs category have their rights, for ,example my friend he rears two
pets
 in their home he treated them as a friend he gave them a good service, took their
pets
 to the hospital every month with a shower every six days as I was saw their
pets
 eats healthy food
in addition
, rears dogs or any kind of
animals
 we need as human to give him as much as we can for suitable life and comfort.
As a consequence
, other people don't Belive that , they can treat
pets
 as a part of their family, some of them say rears
pets
 in our home
is
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 not good for our health because they bring many diseases
in addition
, every place where
pets
setting
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 in leaving it dirty,
for instance
, My father rears a dog about 4 months but he swears to not accepting any
animals
 or
pets
 in their home every place become unclean and when my father focus on their work,
furthermore
, the
pets
 came fastly in their desk and that distract it. in conclusion, in my opinion,
pets
 and other handsome
animals
 should behave as members o the family or friends of their owners, I believe that the aforementioned point is strongly supporting my viewpoint.
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