Fewer citizens go to their local museums and galleries than ever before. What are the causes of this? What can be done about this?

Nowadays the number of citizens who intended to go to local
museums
and
galleries
are
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decreasing. There are two main reasons why
this
could happen which I will discuss below
as well as
the solutions regarding
this
issue. One of the first problems of the lesser people going to the buildings
were
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due to
the
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motivation.
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Publics
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The publics
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particularly the young generation is now less passionate and motivated
in
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learning history.
For instance
in Indonesia, students usually perceived that history-related lessons are not interesting which led to their lack
curiosity
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of curiosity
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about historical things including
museums
and
galleries
. The second reason,
it
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seems that it is
due to
the perception of the less importance of arts or history in nowdays-life. Some young generations are more concerned
in
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future-beneficial subjects
such
as business and technology. Another problem that needs to be considered, there is
a
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view that historical things and arts had been provided through
Internet
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the Internet
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.
In other words
, those who have the
internet
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can access historical subjects without visiting directly to
galleries
or
museums
.
Although
the motivation to go to that places was more declined, there are several possible solutions to
this
problem.
First,
visiting historical places and art shows could be made a school programme, which
thus
could encourage the young generation to be more aware of that.
Secondly
, an improvement of
museums
and
galleries
which include modern stuff
such
as infiltrating video games related to museum’ stuff would be more interesting to the youngsters. In summary, there are several causes affecting a fewer
publics’
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publics
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intention starting from
lack
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a lack
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of interest in studying history and arts, the perceived less importance of the subjects to the technological issues.
However
,
this
issue could be done by promoting them in the school system and creating more modern technology in the building and arcade.
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