Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having large numbers of toys.

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advantages - creativity
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, analysing the shapes of a toy and how it works improves and develops
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fine motor
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them to utilize
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hand coordination.
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, they are able to perform basic tasks like tying up shoe laces, lifting, and keeping items without dropping them. These skills once substantially developed during
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childhood benefits
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life. disadvantage, Providing
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number of toys
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young ones and their outdoor play time is compromised. It means, playing
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is equally essential for the physical advancement of young ones as their bones and muscles develop during physical movements.
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, playing inside does not develop the
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instance, the immune system of children who frequently play outdoor games are likely to develop
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immunity against several germs and viruses
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frequent exposure.
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, children
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engaged
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with toys are more likely to adapt
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stimulate creativity
  • imagination
  • fine and gross motor skills
  • hand-eye coordination
  • overwhelmed
  • focus
  • value
  • appreciation
  • neglect
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • meaningful activities
  • interactions
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