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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the country side. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals are of the belief that a good remedy for solving
traffic
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 jams and transportation deteriorates is moving from country sides to big
cities
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 , a viewpoint with which I entirely disagree for a
number
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 of important rationals.
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 with, I believe that despite the importance of
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 problem in today's nations with the booming crowd and raising the
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 of cars every second there are not any practical long-term solutions.
Firstly
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 there should be a close investigation into the main cause of
traffic
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 jams in any area and after
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 it is logical to offer proper clues for each zone per case.
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, I am personally of the belief that the increasing
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 of cars, car collisions
as well as
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 substandard or insufficient roads are the main existing reasons for transportation
problems
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.
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, there are a
number
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 of solutions for current
traffic
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problems
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 which are working properly in some
cities
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.
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instance
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 improving transport systems and developing the
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 or quality of roads
as well as
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 the culture of driving
such
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 as providing carpooling facilities can help roads with less load of cars
especially
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 in rush hours. In some other
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cities
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 New York City there is a developed system of the subway which is very handful for
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 headache. In conclusion,
while
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 some might argue that moving to
cities
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 for a living could be a good solution for
traffic
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problems
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 since there are better road and controlling systems in these areas. In my opinion,
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,
this
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 idea is rather grounded in mentioned
problems
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 in urban
traffic
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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