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The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.
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The tables depict the data regarding how much
beer
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 and
fruit
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juice
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 consumption per person per year in various nations. It is clear from the graph that
beer
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 consumption is massively more than
fruit
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juice
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.
According to
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 what is shown, in the
beer
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 category, the most country that used
beer
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 in
a significant amounts
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significant amounts
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 was Ireland with 155
litres
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,
following
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followed
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 by Germany and Austria where they had 119 and 106
litres
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 respectively. The other nations were hovering between 79 and 98
litres
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.
On the other hand
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, for the other item, Canada illustrated the peak amount of
fruit
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juice
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 as 52
litres
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. After
which
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this
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 The United States had the second level on the table by nearly 43
litres
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. For the rest of
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the countries
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countries
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 they showed a resembling pattern where they had figures between 39 and 24
litres
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that
fruit
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juice
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 usage was modest compared to the amount of
beer
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 consumed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beer, fruit, juice, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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