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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is thought by some groups oF people that some specialists,
in particular
 doctors and engineers have to be obligated to
work
 in the
country
 where they are completing their studying
programms
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programmes
programme
programs
.
Whereas
, there are some
opposits
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opposites
opposite
 considering that they can be allowed to
work
 wherever they want to do. In my opinion, each person is
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 to choose his place to
work
, and
thereFore
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 they can choose it despite the fact that it could be located abroad. Undoubtedly, those who think that some high-educated specialists have to
work
 for the economy, and
therefore
country
 which provided these corresponding educational
programms
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programmes
programs
. But
this
 issue can be only regulated if there are some
intial
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initial
 agreements between the educated and the organisation providing
this
 corresponding educational programme or, perhaps, even financing it. Whether it was mentioned in the documents that the Students should
work
 in
this
 corresponding
country
 aFter completion oF the course or not, In nowadays world of free trade and labour exchange it is impossible to impose
such
 obligations on a person, unless it was agreed in advance.
However
, even in
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 there should be
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 some other options to be dealt with. It is a crucial aspect
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a
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modern society to establish rules and programmes enabling people all over the globe to be able to Find a job in
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Foreign markets. As it meets the requirements oF
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further
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economic growth and
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regional development.
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, I think must be undeniably granted the right to Find
work
 abroad
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country
 they received their training. These people who share
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 view are actually right in terms oF the current world labour policy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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