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Nowadays, people who live in cities have to encounter many problems. What are these problems? What can be done to solve these?

#people #cities #encounter
Nowadays, a lot of
people
 move to
city
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the city
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 and often encounter
with
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troubles. And I guess that
people
 can face
with
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problems to find accommodation and a new place
for
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to
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 work. I think that the solution
of
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to
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 it could
that
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people
 should be more careful and before they will move to another city
firstly
 they should find a new place for living and
person
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 who can support
and
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them and
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 help with
workplace
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the workplace
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.
People
 who
faced
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are faced
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with
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difficulties to continue their job and life
in
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abroad mostly cannot find a solution for it or just they did not prepare their inner world for something new.
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, if you will change your location first
off
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 all you should find out information about amenities, possibilities and your chance how you can deal and struggle with problems there. If we talk about
workplace
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the workplace
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,
i
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 think that at the moment we have a lot of opportunities to find a new job in abroad on social media and special networks for it. As
regard
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regards
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,
place
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a place
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 to continue our life and live somewhere for
first
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 time we can find a new society or have
a
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apply
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someone close to
you
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us
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 and
this
person
 can help
you
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us
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 with it.
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, you can chat with
this
person
 and find out more information about
flat
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the flat
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. How much does it cost and where you can be
in
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 your first day or ask
this
person
 to live together
.
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 And you can separate money for accommodation and
meal
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 together as well. In conclusion, I think that
have
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having
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 a good worthy mate it's really good
,
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 because you can help
to
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each other
in
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with
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 difficulties. Or just be prepared for
new
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a new
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live
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life
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 and lifestyle in
new
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a new
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 environment and opportunities. And never give up, because in the end you can enjoy new life and appreciate everything that you did.
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