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What are the benefits and drawbacks of online shopping to individuals and society?

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Modern technology is developing in the 21st century, there is no doubt.Nowadays a lot of
people
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use
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 mobile phones. Mobile phone is an integral part of human life. First of all, today there are many online stores and
people
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 can buy everything in online shops.Frankly speaking, it has many benefits for humans, it is very comfortable and I think better than more
market
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. In my view,
people
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 do not have to go outside and
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 do not have to wait in line up, it is very useful for humans.
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, a year ago when I was going to the
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, I saw my friend
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 he advised me that I can
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 an online shop, I can buy everything and I used my phone
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 I bought products through online shopping, the staff brought it to me.I can speak that, it is very easy and useful.
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, I can speak that, it has a bit uncomfortable. Frankly speaking, some
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 do not like online shopping and
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 would not like to
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 it.In my opinion, other
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 prefer to buy everything than online shopping.
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, if someone buys clothes online, it may be tight
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, of course,
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 be angry and
people
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 will not
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 them anymore.In my country, a lot of
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 like using online shopping and me too.I can speak that, some
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 do not like it. In my opinion, it is very useful, because I mentioned above that some old
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 cannot go to the
market
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.Old
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 can purchase everything that stays at home and it is very comfortable.In my country many online stores
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 advertising.Some online stores are advertising their products
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people
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 see and interest in these products.I can speak that,
people
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 can not choose and can not wear clothes and some
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 do not like it, indifferent I prefer online shopping.
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 of the factors, I mentioned above some
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 like using online and other
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 like going to
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. It is not the main side, it is important to think about
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's benefits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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