Nowadays, a growing number of people;e with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatment instead of vising their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The phenomenon of more and more people preferring to buy and take drugs following their own decision rather than go to see a
doctor
has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
issue in question may be, I personally believe
that is
a bad development. Regarding the benefits of
this
development, probably the most significant one is that
this
actually works in defeating most illnesses temporarily. To illustrate, most
medicines
amin to alleviate the symptoms in order to make the patients feel better.
Therefore
, it would make
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public think that they recover from unhealthy conditions.
In addition
, they do not need extra money for seeing a
doctor
.
Thus
, folks tend to try their
medicines
first. Despite the aforementioned advantages of dealing with health issues by ourselves, I still believe
that is
a negative development. The main reason is that the virus may get stronger than any other treatment could defeat. Most of the time, human bodies must carry enough amount of
virus
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in their bodies to trigger negative effects or symptoms
such
as headaches, fever, cough and vomiting. Without those signs, people should unable to notice that they are sick. So, if the treatments or
medicines
we took are not enough to take away all the
virus
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from our bodies, they may become stronger with
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immunity
of
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those drugs you took and make you sick again.
As a result
, lesser
medicines
can have the normal effect for those viruses and sometimes may cause death to the patient by having a cold. So, it is better to get to see a
doctor
and follow his instruction to take the
medicines
. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that using our own treatments and
medicines
can help us get
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again at a cheap price, but it may reduce the
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of those meds to your conditions.
Thus
, I believe that seeing a
doctor
is a better trend in long-turn.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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