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The line graph show of amount of carbon dioxide emissions in 1976 to 2007 in four countries united Kingdom, Sweden Italy and Portugal.

The line graph show of amount of carbon dioxide emissions in 1976 to 2007 in four countries united Kingdom, Sweden Italy and Portugal.
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The given line graph gives data about the amounts of
carbon
dioxide
 emissions
in
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 1976 to
in
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2007 in some countries.There are four
countroes
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countries
.They are
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the united
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united
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United
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 Kingdom,Sweden,Italy and Portugal. Looking at the graph as a whole,untied Kingdom was decrease
this
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during this
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 period,
also
 Sweden fell compared to 1967 to 2007.
While
,
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Italy and Portugal increased from1967 to 2007. In detail,the
number
 of
carbon
dioxide
 emissions reached a peak of about 11 metric tonnes in 1967.After that,Steadly
a
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fall
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 between 1967 to 2007.Sweden increased significantly until 1677
then
dioxide
 emissions decreased gradually after 1977. Italy was
Steady
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a Steady
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 movement up and down between 1967 and 2007.The
number
 of
dioxide
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dioxides
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 went up and down between 1967 and 1977,
then
insignicantly
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insignificantly
indignantly
 increased until 1997.The amount of
carbon
dioxide
 emission in Italy was
no
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not
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 change
of
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by
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 just under
number
 8 metric tonnes after 1997.The
number
 of
carbor
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carbon
dioxide
emission
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emissions
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 in Portugal was duble
the
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increased from 1967 to 2007.Portugal rose significantly until 1997.After that,the amount of
carbon
dioxide
 emission in Portugal remained
all
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the
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 most constant at around 5 metric tonnes between 1977 and 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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