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the pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day.

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The pictures illustrate the difference between a
park
 commencing 1980 till today. The most impressive from the arts is the
park
 was extremely simple from 1980.
Then
 today, the
park
 expand bigger and the
park
 where is the location to people hang out. In 1980, the
park
 had two
sides
 so that a road go across the garden and the lake. On the left hand of the road, there is a lame and it was surrounded by some chairs for citizens who came here to relax. Opposite the lake there were many trees there,
therefore
 visitors can sit down at the trees and talk together. From the main door, there were a lot of flowers to decorate the
park
 to become more
beautifully
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. Nowadays, the
park
 has significantly changed.
Instead
 of two
sides
, today the
park
 has been divided into 4
sides
. As can be ,seen the land of the lake still remained unchanged but it is smaller than before.
Moreover
, two
sides
 of the right hand are the playground for children and visitors who come here to picnic.
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